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Практика выходного дня - Parks

Пишем в комментариях ПЛАН ЭССЕ к теме, данной ниже: полное вступление (2-3 предложения) + 2(!) topic sentences - по 1 для каждого параграфа. Лимит - 120 слов.
Planting trees is very important for the environment. Some people say trees should be planted in the vacant areas of cities and towns, while others believe housing facilities should be built instead. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
То есть вы пишите вступительную часть (перефразирование, мнение если требуется + 2 аргумента) и расписываете каждый аргумент в отдельные предложения
INTRO: ...
Topic sentence for paragraph 1: ...
Topic sentence for paragraph 2: ...  
Материалы для подготовки:
1. Читаете статьи:
Improving the Social Sustainability of High-riseshttps://urbanland.uli.org/public-spaces/from-vacant-properties-to-green-space
2. учите лексику:
https://community-courses.memrise.com/community/course/5714171/ielts-portfolio/43/
Пример моего эссе ниже:
Vegetation is an essential component of any ecosystem. Therefore, there are those who consider that every free area in cities should be used for creating green zones, while others prioritize building accommodation facilities instead. I partially agree with both views. In my opinion, to address
both ever-increasing demand for homes and public green spots, available
land in cities should be used in a new format that is both space-efficient and environmentally sustainable.
Even though I agree that public parks are important for the community’s well-being, their space-efficiency in settings of today’s densely populated cities is highly questionable. Undoubtedly, green spaces bring a lot of environmental benefits by mitigating pollutants. As such, parks are wildlife sanctuaries that are definitely worth taking up
vacant urban areas. However, such publicly accessible green spots are
extremely space-intensive facilities that require sufficient area which
can be otherwise used for more pressing needs. For example, a square
meter of land in densely-populated cities, for example, can either
accommodate hundreds of dwellers living in a high-rise or just a few
trees which are not likely to significantly contribute to the
improvement of air quality.
A viable alternative to traditional massive parks that satisfies both
views can be vertical green neighborhood communities that can make
cities a viable and sustainable habitat. To avoid urban sprawl and
create a green environment, housing should be transferred into the
compact format of high-rises that uses every opportunity to incorporate
green areas into the urban milieu. For instance, vertical greening
systems along with roof gardens may help to make effective use of
otherwise unexploited building surfaces, which can comprise up to 10
square kilometers per a 100-story construction. Therefore, it is
essential to prioritize such constructions when considering the use of
vacant spaces in cities.
In conclusion, I partially agree with both prioritising parks and
accommodation. Traditional spacious parks are losing their relevance in
today’s highly populated cities, which aim at making maximum use of
limited urban space. In such conditions, it is a sustainable
architecture that can address not only the constantly growing demand for
accommodation, but also the need for a habitable urban environment.
Trees play a crucial role in maintaining ecological balance. Even though many people think that empty places should be used for building to solve housing-related problems, I side with those who believe that these places are intended for planting trees to reduce environmental pollution.
Proponents of urban development argue that building new houses or infrastructure in the vacant areas can help to alleviate the housing shortage. 
Others say that planting trees in unused areas brings significant benefits by mitigating pollution, and I agree with this.
Elena Kornienko,
Trees play a crucial role in maintaining ecological balance. Even though many people think that empty places should be used for building [what?]
to solve housing-related problems, I side with those who believe that these places are intended for planting trees to reduce environmental pollution.
Proponents of urban development argue that building new houses or infrastructure in the vacant areas can help to alleviate the housing shortage [which is a usual problem in cities/urban areas].
Others say that planting trees in unused areas brings significant benefits by mitigating pollution [cause by__ / in cities], and I agree with this.
Nowadays, some people believe that every free space in the city should be planted with trees, whilst others argue, the vacant space should be used for building. Reducing space for building by planting trees creates the housing problem, however, trees in cities provide the space for recreation for improving mental and physical health and I side with the former point of view.
Reducing space for building creates the shortage of living spaces, therefore, for people it is becoming difficult to find a place for living in cities.
Creating areas with trees provides the recreational space, which could be used by locals for mental relaxation and for doing physical activities.
Вячеслав Юсупов, 
Nowadays, [not given]
some people believe that every free space ['every' - not given]
in the city should be planted with trees, whilst others argue, the vacant space → it
should be used for building [houses].
Reducing space for building by planting trees creates the housing problem, however [→While building homes can solve housing problems]
 trees in cities provide the space for recreation for improving mental and physical health [of the citizens]
and I side with the former point of view. →, and I agree (right after you stated the argument, not at the end)
Reducing space for building [nobody reduces space - there is just a choice: trees or houses?]
creates the shortage of living spaces, therefore, for people it is becoming difficult to find a place for living in cities. [and I agree]
Creating areas with trees provides the recreational space, which could be used by locals for mental relaxation and for doing physical activities.
Trees have a part to play in an every ecosystem. While some maintain that vacant lots have to have trees planted on them, others believe that more houses will be of greater use. Even though housing is essential especially in this age of ever increasing population, I side with former one thinking that it is trees that should fill spare urban spaces as it alleviates pollution. 
Some claim that vacant areas in cities and town should be taken up by housing to accommodate more people. 
Others, I side with, hold the view that it is better that trees should be planted in spare spaces of urban environments since these plants fight pollution. 
Михаил, 
Trees have a part to play in an every → in every
ecosystem. While some maintain that vacant lots have to have → have to be used for
trees planted on them, others believe that more houses will be of greater use. Even though housing is essential especially in this age of ever increasing [urban] population,
I side with former one [what is former?]
thinking that it is trees that should fill spare urban spaces as it → they
alleviates pollution.
Some claim that vacant areas in cities and town should be taken up by housing to accommodate more people.
Others, I side with, hold the view that it is better that trees should be planted in spare spaces of urban environments since
these plants → vegetation
fight pollution.
[quite a good plan]
Nowadays there are two opposing opinions on what should be done with free city spaces. While some believe that these free spaces should be occupied with trees, others consider that it should be taken up by new housing facilities. I support the idea of filling free city spaces with vegetation.
Some believe that towns and cities need to build more housing facilities in free city spaces because a lot of cities and towns are now densely populated and more and more are moving to cities, thus a lot of people need places to live.

Others consider that green areas are highly important in cities and towns and I side with this opinion because green areas in cities and towns not only create recreational zones for people, but also act as stress relievers and reduce people’s anxiety.
JJ, 
Nowadays [not given]
there are two opposing opinions on what should be done with free city spaces. While some believe that these free spaces should be occupied with trees, others consider that it → they
should be taken up by new housing facilities. I support the idea of filling free city spaces with vegetation. [WHY? → give an argument + an argument for the opposite view]
Some believe that towns and cities need to build more housing facilities in free city spaces
because a lot of cities and towns are now densely populated and more and more are moving to cities, thus a lot of people need places to live. [make the argument short for topic sentence→ to alleviate housing shortage in cities]
Others consider that green areas are highly important in cities and towns_, and I side with this opinion
because green areas in cities and towns not only create recreational zones for people, but also act as stress relievers and reduce people’s anxiety [too long and detailed].
Landscaping enhances habitats. Even though some people believe that all vacant urban spaces should be planted with trees or greenery, while others advocate for developing more residential areas. I agree with aspects of both perspectives.
As construction expands housing areas, fewer people need to live in cramped conditions, at the same time this also increases the strain on public services such as waste collection.
Parks and green spaces can promote biodiversity by providing habitats for small wild animals and birds, however, maintaining parks can be costly, including expenses for plant care and facilities.
Алена Рык, 
Landscaping enhances habitats. [quite an arguable paraphrase]
Even though some people believe that
all [not given]
vacant urban spaces should be planted with trees or greenery,
while others [→ others ('while' OR 'though')]
advocate for developing more residential areas. I agree with aspects of both perspectives. [give arguments]
As construction expands housing areas, fewer people need to live in cramped conditions, at the same time this also increases the strain on public services such as waste collection. 
Parks and green spaces can promote biodiversity by providing habitats for small wild animals and birds, however, maintaining parks can be costly, including expenses for plant care and facilities.
[Topic sentence should only present an argument why some people believe this way. A concession ('However') should go at the end of §
+ if you don't quite agree with any view, you have to suggest a third one, because now you position is not clear]
Some people say that free areas of the cities should be used for urban forestry for improving ecology. Others believe that it is better to extend accommodation facilities by building new houses to decrease house prices. I partly agree with both points of view and think that the optimal decision is constructing vertical green neighbourhood communities that will address both of these problems.
Building parks in the vacant city’s lands might help improve air quality in the city, but the usual park took too much space, as eco-neighbourhoods are compact and eco-friendly.
Even though building new accommodation might lower the house price, it damages the city ecology, while green skyscrapers help with the accommodation problem without drawbacks.
Надежда Павлова, 
Some people say that free areas of the cities should be used for urban forestry for improving ecology. Others believe that it is better to extend accommodation facilities by building new houses [there] to decrease house prices. I partly agree with both points of view and think that the optimal decision is constructing vertical green neighbourhood communities that will address both of these problems.
Building parks in the vacant city’s lands → land
might help improve air quality in the city, but the usual park took → conventioanl parks take
too much space,
as → while
eco-neighbourhoods are compact and eco-friendly.
Even though building new accommodation might lower the house price, it damages the city ecology, while green skyscrapers help with the accommodation problem without drawbacks.
[quite a good plan, but make sure that in the body §§ you address the GIVEN views properly (explain why people think so) before you suggest your own alternative]
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